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All my airs among women I shud ha' been chated by a basin-faced fool av a cav'lryman not fit to trust on a trunk. Presintly I found him in our lines--the Bobtails was quartered next us--an' a tallowy topheavy son av a she-mule he was wid his big brass spurs an' his plastrons on his epigastrons an' all. But he niver flinched a hair. "'A word wid you Dempsey ' sez I. 'You've walked wid Dinah Shadd four times this fortnight gone. ' "'What's that to you?' sez he. 'I'll walk forty times more an' forty on top av that ye shovel-futted clod-breakin' infantry lance-corp'ril. ' "Before I cud gyard he had his gloved fist home on my cheek an' down I went full-sprawl. 'Will that content you?' sez he blowin' on his knuckles for all the world like a Scots Greys orf'cer. 'Content!' sez I. 'For your own sake man take off your spurs peel your jackut an' onglove. 'Tis the beginnin' av the overture; stand up!' "He stud all he know but he niver.
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